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The light of your love shines within me,
my heart now swims in your brook,
the joy of my mind is now elevated,
now i'm relying in the arms of your love.

Day by day my soul sings a melody,
a rhythm of love that is unrelenting,
you know well you're my new crush,
and i'm ever ready to take you as mine.

For a real love never hides it self,
each moment it displays a feeling,
a feeling of romantic love and emotion,
you're now my dream, my dream reality.

your happiness is a link to my soul,
I'm poised to give you forever bliss,
a dignified love and a sound peace,
will I avail throughout your stay with me.

©Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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a girl from your country, I would be impressed! You address the concerns of most women, with your profound pledge of love.
The only misstep I see is the tense of the line that says: "You [knew] well you're my new crush."] It should be [know].
Nice job. ~ Geezer.

Writing purely for oneself, is the ultimate in defensive posture.

You really helped me here. Thanks for the eagle eye Gee...
Always grateful!

"Poetry is invariably imbued with a sense of calm and serenity".


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