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notional time

Submitted by loved on Tue, 2012-06-12 12:05

notional time

the Brain Child of Time,
everything is relative,
the number of full moons
one does transit,
through a life's sojourn,
the number of sun rises
at the equator
since 7000 years ago slated,
all give relative notions,
to the fourth dimension
we all and you too do,
call it Time.

take the discourse a bit further,
some last much longer
many can’t even eject
the meaning of what I conceal,
hope you do get
or else how in the cauldron of time,
we, you and I and the rest
will ever beget,
if the inescapability
of the relativity of motion,
we may call time, we forget.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Ian.T

Tue, 2012-06-26 10:25

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I have travelled far to find an answer to your time,
I used thought to wander the many ages of man to find an excuse for using time.
I exceeded the limits set out now I have a quandary.
I travelled too fast and when I arrived back here, you had long gone to dust, so I had to back track to find your words, but the words had gone with the dust of the universe, but do not worry the thoughts that gave you the words, were for ever so I reached out and grabbed them back as all thoughts are eternal.
Your relativity was fine now I have No time for the rest LOL,
Yours Ian.T

PS:- Why???? the 7000 years do you not know that even man has been here 100,000 years and it has only taken him the last 60 to desecrate a beautiful Planet.. We probably evolved from a rampant Pack rat lol...

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So find more reasons to believe in others..

loved

Tue, 2012-06-26 15:16

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Your relativity was fine
now I have
No time
for the rest LOL

gr88888888888888
time
you used again

loved

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