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nothing beyond.... beyond

Submitted by lovedly on Wed, 2016-06-08 12:49

nothing beyond.... beyond

when you go
nothing goes with you
but only a trait or trace
for a while leave you...
so again ...

I read it all
we go and just imagine
what and when you see
a dead rat
that's we also similarly

there is no beyond yonder
don't wonder all is asunder
we are here on earth only
no where beyond the beyond
all is theory
our magnetism purely
you call soul
reaches its ultimate goal
as the lightning from heaven earths
so does our magnetism

our spirit is just a name
some live long
some are forgotten by
the third breakfast
Amen

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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jane210660

Wed, 2016-06-08 13:21

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This is great, my latest poem and this juxtapose very well. Two different aspects of who we are.
Or at least I see it as two differing stances. Jx

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lovedly

Wed, 2016-06-08 13:56

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but tomorrow

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scribbler

Mon, 2022-08-22 15:03

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We will disagree on the premise that there is nothing beyond our lives here on earth. I have been given reasons to believe there is a life after death. But your poem is well written

scribbler

Mon, 2022-08-22 15:03

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We will disagree on the premise that there is nothing beyond our lives here on earth. I have been given reasons to believe there is a life after death. But your poem is well written

lovedly

Mon, 2022-08-22 22:21

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