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Nothing

Dangling from a silken thread
a finely woven spiders web
some claim nothing is for free
yet nothing has a crushing cost
the final tab for every loss
a toll the often goes unseen
it seems that the sharpest knives
hide themselves in loving eyes
rending cuts so clean and deep
another wound, another scar
another brutal Au Revoir
another storm leaves you lost at sea
clinging to a fraying rope
nothing stealing the last rays of hope
nothing is the farthest point south of free
The darkness has found its way back in again
darkness my familiar friend
until the time when nothing frees me

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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I know that you aren't actively editing, but I would try to re-work the last line to have the free and me switched around. ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Good point I think I like better ending on me instead of free

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Sadness throughout this poem is all I see.. Well written but heartwrenching

Chrys

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Love will be the death of me but by GOD I'll get some good poetry out of it

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