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Notes to Gogo (Grandma)

I see you in the mirror Gogo:
even in the darkest times of the night,
I see you still;
I close my eyes and go back to teenageville -
it all comes clear bold and real.

I long to kiss the sweet aroma
eavesdropping from your kitchen,
testament of easterly soups.

A million strolls we made to the stream:
fermented cassava and breadfruit -
our lot and craft,
graced your firm palms;
washed clothes left to dry on Idoto greens.

Your beautiful cursive writings
underlined your years of British exposure, and
that blank note you gave me to scribble,
I'll ink it with love filled with fondest memories -
wide as West Oakland to West Africa:
confluence of creativity and new friendships.

As a greying hair speaks of age and grace,
Gogo, your's seneraded strength and stay,
until that dark-dressed death
broke and sucked away your breath!
But not your towering legacies,
long built in pride and aces!

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I love the lines, "I love to kiss the sweet aroma
.eavesdropping from your kitchen
.a testament of Easterly soups."

This reminds me of my own grandma. Nice visuals [except for the last].
I do think that the beginning of the lines could be better, if you don't mind not capitalizing everything and don't end the lines with commas, [We expect them to continue in the next line]. ~ Geezer.
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Dear Geezer.

Advice taken and effected.

Many thanks for your appreciation.

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and reads better too! Again, very nicely done. ~ Geezer.
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Gracias Geezer!

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