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Not trying is worse than trying

Not trying is worse than trying because if you don't try then you are destined for failure. For if you try at least you have a chance it's small but it's still a chance towards success. Imagine life is like a stairway that keeps breaking behind you for if you don't try or do nothing then the step your on will inevitably break and then you begin falling into the abyss called failure forever broken forever falling forever lost in the labyrinth of failure because you didn't try your in this abyss of failure.

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so look if you make some spacing
how it could possibly be easier to read, I adore Dante too by the way.

Not trying is worse than trying,
because if you don't try then you are destined for failure.
For if you try at least you have a chance,
it's small but it's still a chance towards success.
Imagine life is like a stairway,
that keeps breaking behind you,
if you don't try or do nothing
the step your on will inevitably break
and then you begin falling into the abyss called failure,
forever, forever broken forever falling forever lost
in the labyrinth of failure
because you didn't try you’re in this abyss of failure.

for a young man with such a challenging life, i applaud your thoughts, you have a way of writing powerful arguments and the skill to put them across. i believe regret things you have done and not the things you haven't which is pretty much what you are saying here. I agree not trying is far worse than trying.

Have a good day young man.

Thank you...Teddy

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Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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Hlm life without literature is a life without logic.

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