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Not the same...

I was once filled with darkness
like the "tail side" of the moon...

I lived behind all the lights.

Like sharpened fingernails raked down my face, grasping for someones concern...

only to be bloodied by the desires
and addictions of my youth.

Then like a flare set up from the ocean
hope burned in the night sky...

as I watched my imperfections turn to dreams, dancing upon the sea.

Revealing that perfect ghost, calling me out upon the waves...

and I've never been the same, since that first step of faith.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Content level: 
Not Explicit Content


I like your piece. Looking forward to reading more of your work.

I would only suggest, not add to your piece. I’d place some periods at the end of your phrases, gives the reader opportunities to be ponder more. I really like the use of white space to make your emphasis.

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Thank you...
It's kinda funny because I initially had them there and removed before posting.

I do agree, I like the periods.

author comment

I think I've begun to see that dark side that is hinted at in your message. Faith in our characters is what keeps us alive! No ideas about how to make this better. ~ Geezer.

It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

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