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Not Choka But Rhoka (Rhyming Choka)

We need to be free
To agree or disagree
Confident to see
All angles to each story
Not to fight or flee
To stand our ground openly
Firm but fair as family

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There is A Rhyme and Reason to Rhoka (Rhyming Choka) - my variation of Choka.
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Democracy, in short. This is what 2016 US election is all about.
In other words, oil and water cannot mix, but both are needed. Peaceful coexistence. Stockpiling the nukes and upgrading the fighters and submarines, the drones and missiles promote good business and etc and etc. Thank you for putting it in a powerful poetic way.

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Vivovon - you have dissected my Rhoka to an atomic, or should I say nuclear level. I was aiming for a larger and general sphere. It should be My Way and Your Way and differences of opinion handled in a High Way. Unfortunately, the land of Mahatma Gandhi has become the largest purchaser of weapons in the world and is intent on repeating all the mistakes of nations who worked themselves up into states of aggression and conflicts. The Rhoka is a call to disarms and peaceful coexistence with people all over the world. All peoples living in peace, progress and prosperity and finding refuge in their own countries in their own homes.

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I would agree with Mark. Capitalization of every first letter of the word is heavy to read. It is bumpy. It also takes away the beauty of the poem and its stream.

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mark and vivovon, although i do not want to plagiarize the style of e.e. cummings, i will lower my case so that it does not become a capital case and affront your sensibilities.

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A great Choka though as it is a Japanese form not used very often.
The use of Capitals matters not but best a quieter way of talking.
Choka 5,7,5,7,5,7,5,7,7 Long Poem and this conforms, then you have the idea that some of their writes are endless, Our own Barbara Writes has an on going writing of Japanese forms you should join in it will hone you syllable use.
Well written here, Yours Ian..

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Thanks Sparrow for your kind words and advice. I will definitely act on your suggestions . Have a safe flight.

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