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NO WHITE FLAG

Life is not a stroll
In the park.
It's a reach for something
In the dark.

You have to keep what
Matters close.
Memories come back and
Haunt you like a ghost.

We are the
Strong ones.
Still standing when
Hell comes.

Things change in the
Blink of an eye.
Still drinking when
The well runs dry.

Doing the right thing,
Lay it on the line.
Still believing when
The sun doesn't shine.

We can handle a
Hard day's night.
We won't quit when
It doesn't go right.

Have to man-up when
The time comes.
Life brings it, and
Then some.

We face adversity with
A stiff upper-lip.
No white flag,
We go down with our ship.

Turbo1904 ♥

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Comments

you have blessed us with another set of life's rules. if only everyone adhered to them, it would be paradise!

*many hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Hello my friend Cat. I do enjoy reading your reviews. Always smiling after I read them. Thanks for reading them and thanks for the smiles. Hugs!

Best Wishes,
Turbo1904

author comment

my mother told me I was "too stupid to lie" did anyone ever tell you that in any form? the thing was: my Dad told me that if I lied, then I would have to remember the lie in case I had to repeat it. And... I might have to tell another lie to support the first lie, and on and on... so it was best and simplest just to tell the truth in the first place!

*hugs, Cat

When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

In order to keep the rhythm and make it smooth:
Delete the [and] in line: "Memories come back"

"When the sun [don't] shine [Don't worry about proper english use, people know
what you mean and it isn't really [bad] english.

Put "When on the same line as: [When] the time comes, that way, it doesn't produce a hesitancy
in the next line.

Listen to your brain when you read over, read it a few times and you will see the spots for pauses.

Don't worry so much about how it looks on the page as how it sounds. I would much rather read something
that sounds better, than it looking a certain way.
All-in-all, a good piece. ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Thank you for pointing out the little mess ups. I can feel them, just not sure how to fix it. I will take a look at the poem and make the changes. Thanks again Geezer, Love reading your reviews.

Best Wishes
Turbo1904

author comment

it for the people that appreciate and respond by making changes to better their work, [even if the suggestions aren't mine]
I really enjoy the effort that people put into writing well. [Which is why I spend so much time doing what I do].
Keep writing and trying, ~ Geezer.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

I just enjoyed reading this scintillating piece!
Very informative!

Nice job!

"Poetic license
gives
the poets
the free will to
embroider a good tale
and deviate from the established rules of language"~Jackweb

WOW thank you so much for the review. Glad you enjoyed my poem. I have a blast writing them. Thanks again.

Best Wishes,
Turbo1904

author comment

Or even, our Armed Forces…

I really like this piece, it reached out broadly.

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