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No sounds of bells today

I reach for the skies
in search of you
and
the birds mock by
why are you searching
for whom,
we all are angels flying by
once in human garb
now in garbage tins we reside
far above the sky
beyond your naked eye
and
you know why

we are all in search of the
ONE
who made the Sun
and
helped it emit us
as girls and son
in continuation
ala continuum

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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This world is a sad place
with so many poor
and
living below the poverty line

even in richer countries
you find many without shelters
the state allocates some dough
and
many more helpless grow
to add on to the woe
in misery they all glow

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the sparking of youth...
as two teens meet
after a long break...
for an aligned date..

You are the charm
a fire burns
as I smoke you
from within
love is all that I think
as flames burn me
I dream of you
severing all love
is it true...

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You seem to be thrashing around with a myriad of thoughts that are incapable of giving you direction.
Your writes are very good and we believe in your ability to bring out some great works.
The first piece will make a good base theme for a grand poem.
The second is what you see now write about it in poetic forms put your feelings in there, stop holding back.
The third write appears to be of a yearning for someone you let go, well the old saying goes if they come back they are yours always, but if they don't come back hunt them down and well you know the rest lol.
Take care young Bard you know that these three pieces are good but only the bones of what you should be writing.
Yours as always, Ian..

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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

u found three
its incredible of me
my thoughts are provoking
only me

and i stand out in the open
come read me

As Ian does ever so often

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