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No Right Tine

Submitted by Sir Bernard on Fri, 2018-08-17 20:25

There is nothing like "the right time"
Stop sitting and waiting for it
Of course everything is going to be fine
But it won't be until you start working towards it

I have seen many a talent wasted
Many treasures untapped
Many people frustrated
Many visions warped

It's not because they don't have dreams
It's not because life is unfair
Its not because their hope does not beam
Neither is it because things are unclear

It all boils down to one thing
They call it "the right time"-
A time supposedly coming
When everything will be automatically fine

I challenge you today
That such a time does not exist
So get up and take action
And you won't regret you did

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Cloudthings

Tue, 2019-03-19 08:44

Cloudthings's picture

Good write & good advice!
I've been looking at undiscovered work & it was a pleasure to find this here.

i like the sentiment, the style is very direct & clearly accessible, the rhythm works ( though I feel certain you could probably smooth it if you worked just a tiny bit & if you wanted to). There is (I think) a typo in the title? Should it be time, not tine? Look forward to reading more from you.

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

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