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If the light of the Moon
Is to be my crown
And the Venus star; an emerald within--
Then the hold of the night
Is its weight upon my head

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Of the weight of darkness upon one

I agree with Beau on this one and in the fourth line I think that either hold or whole would work, that hold of night would weigh heavy

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Regards Jayne-Chloe

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

That would be me, recognized your photo

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