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Nighttttime
If the light of the Moon
Is to be my crown
And the Venus star; an emerald within--
Then the hold of the night
Is its weight upon my head
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Frenchf
Tue, 2013-02-12 23:56
Interesting concept
Of the weight of darkness upon one
Seren
Wed, 2013-02-13 08:29
I agree with Beau on this one
I agree with Beau on this one and in the fourth line I think that either hold or whole would work, that hold of night would weigh heavy
There used to be a club special at our old site ? Are you the same person ...
Regards Jayne-Chloe
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
club special
Wed, 2013-02-13 15:51
yup..
That would be me, recognized your photo