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Night Visitor

You dreamer, do not coyly pretend
that my passion cannot reach you.
Do not deceive yourself; you are
not secure. Like a shadow cast
by moonlight, I come to you.

Oh—you are asleep? I think not;
for your rapid breathing, the fall
and rise of your breasts,
all give you away.

There is only you in this room.
Are you aware of my presence?
You see, I possess a charm
that allowed me to enter your home
undetected. I bartered my soul
for the spell that made this visit possible,

You are quite lovely, but I must
not trust my eyes alone; therefore,
I touch, follow every curve, each line
of your body, and suddenly—I feel
nails etching my shoulder.
I have discovered your passion,
and now I do not rue the small price
I paid—with my soul.

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Now this is some good poetry. Applause. I see nothing to change but this is one I'll reread. Not sure if we've met before your name is familiar. Maybe I've just seen it in stream before. Anyway a great read I really enjoyed it.


Regards Jayne.

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

no--I don't recall meeting you--unless we have met on another plane, in the vast galaxy of dreamland, lol. But, I'm glad to meet you now and here, dear lady. Thank you for your generous comment; I'm greatly honored by your kind words. Please enjoy your Sunday. Jerry

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I must be on another plain. For me tis Monday lol

Lovely to meet you

Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

I finally realized you are from "down under," meaning, you live on another plane of existence, lol. Have a nice Monday, dear "not-so-plain" Jayne. I love your avatar; very mysterious. Nice to "meat"you (oops), lol. Jerry

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