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"New York" "New York"

Digit awoke from a deep sleep
Thinking that appointments he must keep
To lie low for a year or two
As off the scent the detectives he threw

His friend from school that received his wealth
Was told to wait and not spend it all on himself
Now Digit had a task on his mind
He scoured the papers his friend to find

He found that he had left for America there,
New York he saw in the papers columns clear.
He booked a flight that day and flew no time to lose
A lady, green with book in hand he would chose

The one in the States he laughed his mind to confuse
A visit as soon as he could, their hospitality he would use
He hoped the police would not know he was there
No "modus operandi" or his record, so there was no fear.

It was easy to purchase his sharp tools of trade
Not wanting a gun just a few sharp blades
To make a plan was the first task to do,
Famous places he would research anew.

Digit had found serial killers by the score
Here he was in the land of Nevermore
One of his dreams that in his bent ways he wished
Was to join with her, as her own way was brandished.

Where to find her house as this place was strange.
Then a meeting of blades and stories to arrange.
Worlds apart there were others here to find
Nevermore and Killer seemed to fill his mind.

Distance in the states was massive to contemplate
One in New York another in a Southern State.
A plan must be made to join them all up for a feast
A secluded beach for long pig somewhere out East

Digit spent a few days taking in the historical things
A strange sentimental streak that made his head ring .
He cried at ground zero, blending with other minds.
Seemingly a part of him remembered family left behind.

That night he could not think to do more
To his apartment he ran there locking the door
As if afraid that the place he had just seen
Would take away his aims in his twisted dream.

Digit has reached your shore,
watch out Killer and Nevermore..

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My ref to Ground Zero, is purely that whoever goes to New York no matter who, it is one place that all will go to pay respects no matter who, and to Digit it was a link for some reason with the family in his mind that he longed to have but couldn't. Tomorrow he will be better ???
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ian this looks like a movie script, i could see the acute imagery and i am drawn to thinking of your genius, you are a poets poet, in the poem pls what are digits?

digit had found serial killers by the score

so i am thinking whether he kills or not death is indefinite, he is just a conveyance for many

Digit is a serial killer and enjoys many things, he haunts special places, killing to his own order, also he is a little cannibalistic, he was given the name digit by an inspector from Oxford because he cut of a finger or thumb of his victims.
He will spend a couple of days in New York taking in the sites and sort of planning his first American kill. So keep an eye on the News for any unusual murders in national special sites.
He always does his homework, will be in touch as he settles in, Yours Ian.T

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Now this is something different. Rare it is that I read a poem about a criminal like this. Very refreshing. Good job.

Alid

thanks for your visit I hope Digit doesnt visit you, he is surrounded by factual places in his fictitious world of hate and killing.
Just me having a holiday from the norm, and an experiment in writing of the bad side that is always there,
Thanks again, Yours, Ian.T

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Welcome to America! Glad to have you here, maybe Digit, Killer and Nevermore will get together for a little feast. So glad that you have started to expand your horizons! New York is not such a scary place once you start learning your way around. Nevermore and Killer live in the same city and will be glad to show you around. ~ Gee

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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

it is a pleasure to visit New York I heard that Digit was here also, looking for me so I shall have to let him have some of his money to travel the USA.
I flew into Boston a few years ago and was so disappointed that I couldn't kick up those old brown leaves, some modern idiot had put all the leaves in little paper bags and not only that they put dozens of holes in the bags, they said it was how we made tea now, could you imagine the look on the faces at the Boston Tea Party if all they found was tiny bags, sorry the white coated men are at the door again must dash.
Take care young traveller, Yours Ian.T

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don't let the men in white coats take him! Yes, sad to say, most of the tea these days comes in those little white bags. There are a few places around though, that sell tea loose and by the pound. There is one in particular here in Schenectady that I mean to visit; called Divinity Tea. The sign promises all organic-teas and I am sure that they have some from every part of the world. By all means, let Digit have the loot to come visit, he will be warmly welcomed! ~ Gee

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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Digit, is safe and now I have given him a lot of money, he is free to do the things he likes best, I shall follow his journey in the States with great interest,
I shall find a place for him to meet Killer and Nevermore, but it will be a while as he said he has work or fun to do not sure which lol,
Take care I have a few things to see myself in New York,
Yours as always Jack Sparrow

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