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New Year's Day
The old year is out
The new year is in
We all waited for it to begin
Now the new year is here to stay
Goodwill abounds
From friends and family all around
That this year will be
Better than the last gone past
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Cloudthings
Thu, 2019-03-21 08:10
Hiya
& how swiftly this year has flown by & this little gem has been sitting unnoticed... until now! I really like it. Simply straight forward - The only suggestion I might offer is to split the last line & thus take more advantage of that little rhyming couplet?
"The old year is out
The new year is in
We all waited for it to begin
Now the new year is here to stay
Goodwill abounds
From friends and family all around
That this year will be
Better than the last
gone past"
Cheers
Anni
My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"