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New Year?

Submitted by Peggedit on Thu, 2020-01-02 14:12

I spent the 2nd being broken
Stuffing down words
that could barely be spoken

The 1st was gone
Celebrations skewed
Promised shifted
Resolutions renewed

Is this the hype
We all look forward to?

Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
Feeling a little blue these past weeks. This is what came out for me.
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

c lynn brooks

Wed, 2020-05-13 14:25

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In my opinion I think if you used words rather than numbers
first , second it would give your work a more polished look

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