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New Woods

I will take you,
where you should be.
Enclosed and safe,
but also free.

Where as a youth,
I spent many an hour.
The songs of the birds,
the show of flowers.

Turn to the right,
there see the path.
Brush aside the sight,
of those blue skies.

Walk within my trees,
they hold no airs
Feel them close,
around your cares.

Leaving your thoughts,
so far behind.
Ahead is the glade,
I know locked in time.

Its arms whisper,
here you may rest.
Sit where the Oak,
has made you a nest.

A bough that dips,
curves at your feet.
The grass of beauty,
here strewn complete.

It holds your feet,
you are king or queen.
Hold a thought
deep in your mind.

Of quiet peace,
creeping as a vine.
Hear not the babble,
of voices there.

Just let the breeze,
play with your hair.
Let your thoughts,
become crystal clear.

No riot in your mind,
Leave cares behind.
Feel all the places,
you have loved.

Brush and touch,
with thought’s anew
Of things been left,
still, time to do.

Rest here within,
the reasons of years
Tired of holding,
other’s dreams.

Let them see,
the scheme of things.
Now sit and talk,
to whoever you see.

Ask of them,
“What do you want of me?”
They will pause,
you will feel so free.

For you to hold,
not letting go.
Pause a moment,
let them show.

There look inside,
see the real you.
Not the tired one,
of others times.

The inner beauty,
that always shines.
Bathe in this time,
they will give to you.

This rest here,
will see you through.
When ready to look,
at new blue skies.

Hold out your hand,
open your eyes.
The woods will fade,
away as the dew.

They say quietly,
”Thanks for being you”
“Walk within our ways
when you need to see”

“Just turn right,
at the nearest tree.”

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Structured: Western
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Last few words: 
A place I use to go when a young lad where the trees held you in complete peace, I only wish that more of us could find this peace, Yours Ian
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It really is a gift that you can take yourself to this place, I go somewhere but not quite to where you go. There is a gentleness to this poem a light spirit of hope, the rhyme isn't perfect but not all stories are perfect sometimes its within the flaws that the real diamonds shine.

A really lovely read I didn't read it with a critical eye sorry but I am tired and I am just trolling the stream for small gems ;)

I will return on my return and go over it again if you like :)

love always JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

This one is for others to find that secret place where they can go to shut out all problems and rest their minds, the one where I write about places like walking down a street is remote viewing which is quite hard to do but with practice it is beaut, thanks for your visit, take care young Lady,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
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I know there is a place I can go to shut out all the problems life throws at me but sometimes getting there is the issue ;) I am having a bit of time online tonight I will have a look and see if you have posted anything new :)

much love always JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

You have taken me to an abyss of peace where the only sounds are the intones from a mind, louder than the melodies of nature, in a place to pause, ponder and relate with the times bygone and times ahead ...the last few stanzas are my favorite amongst so many lovely ones leading to it...

Hold out your hand,
open your eyes.
The woods will fade,
away as the dew.

They say quietly,
”Thanks for being you”
“Walk within our ways
when you need to see”

“Just turn right,
at the nearest tree.”

I could only say Ahh! you are so good of course in creating landscapes and moods with your words...which Stan too is so good at..

raj (sublime_ocean)

This piece is for what you found.
It is to take you to a place of peace where you can arange your thoughts.
Thank you for liking this one but I would love to see one of your own to see where you can go.
My poem "The Advisor" is one where the librarian goes on remote viewing trips without knowing until he touches another mind, then he is not alone anymore and joins in the world of think..
Take care and thanks for your visit, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
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As suggested by you I will certainly give a try to write something situational on a similar theme and see as you have said "to where it takes me" ..worth a gamble i would say...lol..

raj (sublime_ocean)

There are many beautiful places in India that you can take yourself and us, where even the minor birds will sing sweetly, as the great rivers flow bringing the goodness to the lands where it nourishes the food for its people.
Then the ancient cities of the North that I would love to walk through, even those at the bottom of the Ocean.
Go well young raj it is good to have you walk with us, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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all older poets
are becoming epicurial
and sentimenta
(yes happy not mental0
of the past that was or has been
live in the present
happiness may be
your present to keep
When you again meet
SADIE

loved

Sadie, is laughing, she says that the work she does keeps her so busy.
(Rescuing Children is her main task)
Sadie says something about liking the slippers, or sneakers you call them and says someone was only trying to cheer you ups.
Your physical time moves in many ways yet they are Earth bound, and one day there will be a hell of a party, maybe we will put a lamp in the cave, so that you can see the real writing on the wall lol.
Thank you young Bard, there is much to do and a lot of preparation to say bye to a few friends, so I may need your quill to write some words.
Take care see you soon ??
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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Thank you young Bard, there is much to do and a lot of preparation

to say bye to a few friends, .......* u mean * or eulogy

'''the time to catch a train is now
ere you desire
to miss the last bus
willfully to delay the anointed meeting with Sadie
albeit
I shall wait

so I may need your quill to write some words.

loved

yes, I can imagine it clearly. thank you , Pathfinder.

Treading carefully on the path of life,
my greatest fear is losing my way..
Fortunate I am to have, by my side
good friends I can trust any day!

Alid

I have many places that I can go to rest and in the quiet find a peace that only the universe can bridge.
Where each speck of dust out there can be one of us, I shall wander.
This is just to show others that a simple walk into the woods can be a beautiful thing, where you can rest and wander.
Thanks for dropping in I have retired to my cave for a while, it is dark only to begin with, another place I may write of, lol
Take care and await your places of rest in poetry, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
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I will be waiting for them. Now I wonder how to carry out the assignment given by Wesley..Still not good at describing which from those two terms...euphonic or cacophonous.

Alid

Adj. 1. euphonious - having a pleasant sound;-
"a euphonious trill of silver laughter"

2. cacophonic, cacophonous - having an unpleasant sound;
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Alid just go through your poem and pick out the words that say something Pleasant or harsh just list them for the workshop.
I still have to do this bit yet so not to worry, lol

Take care out there, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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the truth is when I look at the one i have sent for the workshop, I believe I have made the wrong choice.
then I go thinking o gawwwwd, its very prose- sounding.. not much art to it. You can see it in Facing Limitations. I rolled my eyes just thinking about it! Except for the last part when I describe the will to change to betterment and facing the test in life,( I believe that part is euphonious) I really can't say the same for the rest..It's bad and I don't know how to make it better.

Alid

Just remind me which of your poems was put as workshop for Wesley and I will have another look at it for you and see what we can do.
It is late I should be asleep,lol
Take care out there,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

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Its entitled "Facing Limitation". Its about Writer's Block". Have a good rest. May your sleep be blessed with beautiful dreams, my friend. Thank you

Alid

I will come back to this poem and give it the time it deserves when I can, but I wanted to let you know now that I really love "Brush aside the sight of those blue skies."

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Thanks for your visit I will have a look at this one again, I can never remember the pieces I write for long.
I believe they are given to me from some place like a dictation and I send the keys to tap their message.
Where have you been have missed you, Wesley has nearly completed a great workshop, I even had to stretch the boundaries to write a piece.
Young Jess is wonderful in that he has been reading them all for us.
Anyway thanks again will check with you later,
Yours as always Ian.T xx

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So find more reasons to believe in others..

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