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Nevermore (by: eddy styx) senryu string of five

Senryu String: Nevermore (by: eddy styx)

angelic face, love
ever my focus flower
dreaming in your arms

in awe cannot speak
my head full of your essence
precious beyond stars

inspired loving
gracing me in ecstasy
never another

fleetingly time flown
over many lives and moons
in death gone to sky

labor beyond love
hoping to capture her poise
angel hosts give voice

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very well done! You have not missed a beat!

"in awe cannot speak
my head full of your presence
precious beyond stars"

Your love speaks for itself! She is such a lucky woman!
~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

thank you for reading and commenting. I have to admit, I learned a bit from (the) cat! have a grand day and night!

ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat

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