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Nausea
Sweet corn
chicken soup
served steamy hot
Aroma
of corpses
in each spoonful
Goose bumps
of guilt made
me chicken out
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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weirdelf
Wed, 2018-02-21 07:49
Wow!
yes, this brings in one of the most powerful yet seldom acknowledged poetic skills, the sense of smell which links directly to the amygdala, the repository of memory in the human brain.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
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weirdelf
Wed, 2018-02-21 07:50
oh, this wan't linked to the workshop,
was that why you couldn't post another poem?
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
Geezer
Wed, 2018-02-21 08:50
You might well understand...
if you are a Killer fan, why this one appeals to me. It brings to the table; the emotion of eating an animal that once was alive. I wonder if this is why people become vegetarians? Nice work!
~ Geezer.
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raj
Wed, 2018-02-21 10:21
Weirdelf & Geezer
Thank you both for taking time to visit this page, read and comments. Coming from accomplished poets like you is inspiring. I think I have created enough between the lines space for readers to make their own perception which I believe is one of the objectives of Sunku and its aesthetics.
Will keep my effort to get better versed with this new emerging form
Regards...
raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentweirdelf
Wed, 2018-02-21 11:52
try posting to the workshop
instead of pressing the issue.
Do you really need to post a poem every day?
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
raj
Wed, 2018-02-21 12:58
Simply put. This is a choice
Simply put. This is a choice I have made. I am not pressing for anything. I think i am allowed to post 1 poem every 23 hours as per the rule book...
raj (sublime_ocean)
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