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Nascent Dream

The rainbow never held a pot of gold
for me, no more than an illusive lust
just a dream of you draped in a lingerie
limbless, stripped of bust.

Not fluffy locks with silver streaks
swirling above in seductive tease,
I crave for the thunder of fusing mass
flashing the hunger in your eyes.

A pubescent bush aroused by steady rain
not enough to quench its parched terrain
for a lashing of furious torrents it screams
to flood its wanton rivulets.

I dream to roll in the muddy soil
then gush my lust in your flowing streams
the cascading colors in your eyes
more bashful than a rainbow streak.

Your lingerie with shimmering shroud
a silken veneer over a satin hide
moon beams rush to peek at your form
lost to the world, not my eyes.

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Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments

This piece is one assault of sexual imagery to me. lol. Goodness! Luckily its not so much of being erotic but more to appreciating beauty. Good job with the image of lust and beauty.

Alid

Thanks for the visit and your comment. I wish to clarify that this is written with due respect to feminine dignity. The attempt was to draw a parallel / perspective between natural phenomenon and human experience. I believe I have taken due care not to be overtly gross.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Readers read and interprete in their own way. Mayhaps the problem is me, not you. To each his own view. That's the part you can't control. As long as you have done your best to control your work as not to offend anyone, don't worry about it.

Alid

raj you are spot on with this poem in descriptive analysis, your imagery is sublime

Thanks for your time, visit and connecting with my reflections about natural and human events which I have attempted to project in this poem..

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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If I were you
I would be bold enough to show
Many hot lady poets
wrote passionately
I was also embarrassed at times

we men I thought !

Boldness must come from within
poetry is slim
and sexual minds dim

when poetry is as sublime
as this
no one can adoration miss
by not giving
a loving kiss

loved

Thank you for the visit and appreciate your comment, which now makes me feel less guilty lol

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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we must always be true to ourselves
always

loved

Nice one i like of the imagery that you describe various sensations of pressure ,
it like a tango dance is passionate and sensual .Thank you for sharing
My best regards

Thank you for the time to visit this page. I appreciate your leaving a comment which tells me that you enjoyed the read.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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A description of a shared joy, it is usually a taboo subject, but I think that your words made it beautiful. I hope there was a second party.
Well written, Yours Ian. T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Thanks Ian for the time to visit this page and leaving an appreciative comment. I must tell you that there is no second party. This is purely written from imagination and an attempt to co-relate the natural events with the physical purely in an objective manner :)....

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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You have a damn good imagination or someone has been whispering in your ear LOL.
If there is not another to join you on your journey then I suggest that you waste no more time and seek them out, good luck with your seeking maybe a look that you have had from someone has triggered your thoughts, Take care young one, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Let me clarify. It is not that there is no someone in my life. What I meant was that this poem was written in objectivity and not subjectivity. Thanks for stopping by again and your comment.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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I was just being bad to you lol, you take care out there and talk soon, Yours Ian..

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

You have given a descriptive look into the soul of passion as seen through the eyes and heart of a perceptive poet and lover! Enough said!

Thanks for your time and dropping an appreciative and encouraging comment which means a lot, /Good to see you drop by at Neopoet and looking forward to read more of yours......

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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I was trolling through some old poems and found this one, you have come such a long way as a poet hun, this is brilliant and one of your best in my humble opinion...

a pleasure to read and find...kudos

love and biggest hugs Jayne xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

Thanks for the visit and read. Glad to know you liked it a lot.

Much love n hugs...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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you had written this one long ago
I thought it was new
a great coincidence
I posted a dream poem

of a lady down in her blues
seeking solace from people like you

but then the two platforms are totally different ...
she was thinking of an exit from ma planet
you of a transpired love
with a new essence
hope my comment
makes some sense

loved

Thanks for stopping by again and your appreciative comment. Different perspectives of the same subject are bound to create different strokes in two poems..

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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