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Naked Autumn Trees.......NOVEMBER CONTEST(REVISED)

Naked Autumn Trees

Seeds- Root-Trunk-Branches –
soft feathery leaves
raindrops
small still
Spell bound nudity,
I am the autumn tree
lanky trunk
in cold winters breeze
I freeze...

My bark -like thin skin
tightens---
the warmth within me
I ought to contain
Autumns will come again and again
but for many years
I have to sustain...

My multi colorful leaves
strewn across the fields
still remember me as a mother tree
now stark bare and nude
but still lovely
why has it, its kids now abandoned.
lonely isolated leaves do wonder.

Out in the whiteness of snow
now I stand naked all alone
hoping spring will spring- soon enough
to re-clothe me

I will face many more autumns similarly
so friends abide with me
I stand stark naked
nude yet so lovely
all come to admire me
not birds only...

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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NOV CONTEST

''NAKED TREES''

READ ON PLEASE
Lovedly

author comment

By far one of your better works I hope that I am not pushed into third position on the contest now as I am fed up of cruises no matter where..
Take care young Bard and you do see what we have been on about all these years, you have wasted so much time when you can write great stuff,
Yours as always Ian..

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Unconditional love to you all.
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Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

you love me
you adore
some only condemn
but I am above all of em
for you I can still withdraw
if you are going to lose your cruise

haahahahaaaa
lol
stan
styly

bard is now free
for thee

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have been pushed over the
C L I F F
the young turks uplift
run from here
don't enter anymore contest my Dear
I hate to Be branded as a
BORN LOSER
THOUGH I AM
...excellently SUCH A one

author comment

I is still the same and sometimes I write something that many like, but this time I told you I would be third, and all I won was a hamper from a well known shop on Oxford street London.
There was a miniature of single malt in there so I was pleased, the rest I gave to a food bank down the road,
Take care young Bard and keep writing,
Yours as always Ian..

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Give critique to help keep Neopoet great.
Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti

A very nice poem. I especially like your comparing leaves with children. Best of luck in contest.......stan

again Stan
u r so considerate towards me

author comment

And congrats for an HM (FRIEND)
I too earned once

my heart nearly burst
they know it will

so i never ever in life
have ever come first

second from front
always

last but one
in marathon

NEVER BE FIRST NOR LAST

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