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My Twin Rainbow Supreme

I spied a Rainbow Grande one time
I could've hit it with a stone,
the sun opened wide the way her morning does
so I watched the twin rainbow, alone.

Serendipity's grande gesture sent glowing rays
flooding my eyes with awed radiance,
it was too much to see by myself,
but I absorbed it's entire brilliance!

Humbled am l as l try to say words
that accurately tells all that it brings;
this private Twin "bow" Supreme showed colors to me
with a vibrancy that taught me to make wings;

and those wings soared me higher, and ever so much
exhilarating myself through and through;
which reminds me of another dance with radiance supreme;
our eyes met but, l was alone on that day,too!

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I liked this one a lot. Just a little nit-picking, but you have spelled a couple of words wrong.

radiance and exhilaration. I do read your works, but don't always comment. I felt I should let you know that I liked this one. ~ Gee

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...I fixed my fau paux on my spellings, I believe.
Thanx, again;
doc.

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I loved this write it seemed to step outside your normal write of four lines and predictable patter, not that I didn't like those also..
But this is a step into another sphere, well written and a joy to read, once I was in another country and we were flying around and there was the complete rainbow as a circle it was beautiful..
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

...it was definately a wierd moment....seeing something THAT georgeous, and not having even a stranger around, with which to share it's brilliance!
I saw it, that's what made me write outside my box. I believe l was inspired.
Thanx, again;
doc.

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