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My thoughts and now also yours

My thoughts
My thoughts are only my thoughts or am I dreaming still are these my thoughts or yours I don’t know still Does the mind read others thoughts or their poetry their muses and writing to get sufficient wordy ammunition I wonder still yet my thoughts resound and rebound the voice of many are these thoughts of use to any but without these one can’t convey what’s hidden beneath the surf of stress the minds domain but one must be assured that thoughts alone live down memory lane neither mine nor yours but they are encased in digital form to be read millennia hence by newer generations’ thence who visit thoughts museum but whence!

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My thoughts

My thoughts are only my thoughts
Who can say am I dreaming still
Are these my thoughts or yours?
I still don’t know.

Does the mind read others thought’s
Or their poetry, using their muses,
Writing to get sufficient wordy
Ammunition I wonder still

Yet my thoughts resound
Rebounding the voice of many,
Are these thoughts of use to anyone?
Without these, one can’t convey feelings

What’s hidden beneath the surf?
In the stress of the minds domain
One must be assured that our thoughts
There alone living down memory lane

Neither mine nor your thoughts
Now encased in digital form
Being read millennia’s hence
By our newer generations’

Will they visit our thoughts?
Those who visit the thoughts museum
Will they know from whence they came?
Can I be reawakened in their time?


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Just a little add to the line:- "Writing to get sufficient wordy"
The word sufficient should be sufficiently other than that a thumbs up for our work, just wait till the others comment lol
Have a great evening,
Yours Ian .T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

others... please read Ian's amendment


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