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My Poem

Nighttime manifests peculiarities
And so I was born out of my mind
Real time did not exist, hence life’s rarities
Seconds to the hour, for years you were my power

Your hands dripped into a canvas backdrop
Instants flew on the wing without intent
Fingertips sang, you would not stop
Thought-beams from dreams in different seas

Erode the beach at memories foot
You knew my dreams were platinum arched
When all was awash and all had been visions
to loom and soon blossom to sport your youth

The depths of my mind is where you resided
Fully meant to be quiet, dark and provide
What had driven the days into my maddened cause
A fresh art, never expected to top the heart charts

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

this poem lit the roof off so im so glad you included the military it is also a great poem I wish I could do what you do. I think it was altogether a piece of an illustrated piece of art

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to be a piece of work that would bring back memories to the person it is directed at. Others may guess at the general tone, but only the person who knows... ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

you just blew the tires off of my mind, excellent work! good luck on the contest, with this spectacular entry. your wordsmithing skills have greatly improved, and that is saying something. I love the texture you included. great and smooth imagery!

*hugs, Cat

p.s.
very other-worldly thanks for the trip!

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A wonderful comment!
Mark

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