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Building a house you must-
start from the foundation,
there is no top without root,
no roof without structure.
eliminating poverty-
a nation must plan properly.

in my nation,
the I concur policy-
becomes a culture,
which nurtures no masses.
rather applies torture.

in my nation,
pressure is for the weak,
pleasure is for the strong.
for their strength measures-
their treasure for life.
the sweet lemon bills-
implement for the giants,
the bitter lemon laws abide
for the powerless.

in my nation,
wealth impious omnipotent,
the more profuse abuses the needy.
the gap in between never bleaches,
the lackers suffers violence.
in my nation, politics is polishing.

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Too large of a gap in income between the top and bottom seldom is a good thing. America is seeing this become a problem too although not as bad as in your country. Your poem states your country's plight well....stan

this issue is getting worse every day and i pray it should be over one day, thank you for understanding this.

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