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My mother

My mother never really showed me she cared
My mother told me to go out and become someone worth something
My mother killed all the thoughts I had of being worth something
My mother lashed at my skin with her cruel words
My mother made all my insecurities what they are today
My mother laughed at the tears falling from my eyes
My mother only wanted to fix me not get me help
My mother shut the door to our house in my face
My mother kicked me out of the family without me having to leave
My mother hit me til my skin was black and blue
My mother scared my friends and never let them come around
My mother didn’t understand the pain I felt inside
My mother called me a freak until I started to believe it
My mother told me I'm broken and I can't be fixed
But my mother is broken on the inside too

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are you sure we aren't sisters? my mother was a monster, selfish and addicted to pain pills. you only need "my mother" in the first line, after that it becomes redundant.

then, in the next line:
(she) told me to go out and become someone worth something
after that,
(and) killed, etc. no ands after that:
lashed at my skin with her cruel words etc.

*hugs, Cat

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