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MY MOM WENT

Submitted by lovedly on Tue, 2021-03-02 16:57

went yes
but never left
flying about in the clouds
waiting for me

she promised
she will wait
coz twill be difficult
to find her beyond the clouds
in the mist
where HE
they say also lives

Bless me
my doc says
wait and see

the Earth guys
are still needs of Neo

many younger ones did go
whee no one knows
nor god also
do you know

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
For those who did not read my poem MOM''S SMILES----- First read that please half a century she's been waiting into heaven.... no entry now Covid makes all line up in a Q
Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Geezer

Thu, 2021-03-04 08:23

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just have to wait a bit longer Lovedly. Are you anxious to find out? I could send "Killer" over to help you find the way. That is if you have no objection to being baked or roasted! ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
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if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

Lavender

Thu, 2021-03-04 08:32

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Hi, Lovedly,
What beautiful poetry. Your opening stanza is especially tender.
Thank you!
L

lovedly

Thu, 2021-03-04 11:07

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you are very kind
Others pull my leg
I don't mind
at times they are also kind
Gee hehe

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Geezer

Thu, 2021-03-04 16:09

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my comment to you was a bit insensitive. I feel bad that I didn't share my opinion that you are indeed, a tender-warm-hearted person; who wants an answer that no one knows. My apologies, ~ Geez.
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It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

scribbler

Thu, 2021-03-04 16:42

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You don't have my permission to leave yet. Too many of us have already gone

lovedly

Thu, 2021-03-04 16:50

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to go
I just compose poetry
to keep self fit mentally
and stay busy
poetricklie
stan ...before I go
like Ian
shall inform u also
82 nearing now
AH ALL and u know
I've just composed a sonnet
u need to read it
Before I GO

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