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My Mom, My Moon (Sunku)

Pizza
and apple pie
that's ambrosia

Showers
of blessings
are cleansing home

Her face
resembles
that of the moon's.

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Structured: Eastern
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a fine Sunku Rula about a home maker's dream..you need to correct the spello about cleansing

third stanza could also be like

crescent
in my sky [meaning home]
reflects the mood
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Thanks for reading and the correction. Much appreciated

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i also edited my comment with a suggestion
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Way to go dear raj!
I think I need to work more on the subtext thing to amaliorate

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it's a very small change I have proposed to you Rula
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raj (sublime_ocean)

you have missed n in cleansing...
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raj (sublime_ocean)

Not again. Pah! Damn those tired eyes. :(

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it happens to everyone...good to see you posting Sunku

good night
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raj (sublime_ocean)

I was at the Apple Farm
@KINGSTON
wish had realised
your ambrosia
earlier

You've enjoyed it anyway lovedly

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now when you walk my page
it's a pleasant surprise

Lovedly for the kind words

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that of the moon's. [a crescent moon]
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raj (sublime_ocean)

for the thoughtful read.
I thought the change to (crescent moon) won't meet my mother's full moon face, or at least what I see in her:-)
Thanks for your endless support my friend.

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