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MY LOVE IS

I love you more than life itself
as long as the life isn't mine
and long to place you on a shelf
then sip you like a fine old wine.

Your eyes are clear as a spring day
when you are not drunk
.I live to watch your tail sashay
like a departing skunk.

And when I waken beside you
I can't believe my luck
that I am then able to view
a sight like a wrecked truck.

The kiss each time I leave for work
which I dodge from lips and let hit cheek
assure that I will always jerk
away from the body which reeks.

And through the years sharing my life
wishing instead that I was dead
or maybe have married another wife
with whom to share my bed.........

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Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
I'd better not let Susan read this one lol
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would you be in trouble!!! It's funny, but I'm not sure that she would think so. Women have odd ideas about what is funny. Have you been watching Jeff Dunham and Walter? ~ Gee.
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I figure she' not kick me out but I'd be sofa riding a few days lol

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long to place you on a shelf
then
sip you like a fine old wine.

You don't think this was too sugary? lol

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lovedly
with new id
lovedone
stan lol

am aware of that

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