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MY HERO

Submitted by Sheddie on Wed, 2023-03-01 20:22

MY HERO

Gently smile, relive the moments,
Sit, run through the stars,
Sigh, you tore through the torments,
The grace have been graced,
Glory given, justice jolting out,
Alas, you can rest ,roar in peace, no disgraced.
Mercy, virtue will follow you up, roundabout,
When you stay, surrounded, by stars amazing ,
Dwelling in a scenery so beautiful, full of dignity,
Legion of angels to welcome you, with hymns so entertaining,
Thank you my hero, for helping humanity.
Greet the streets of the aftermath, walk in stardom,
Let them salute , worshipping you in the golden court,
While you relax, resting in God's bosom .

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Sheddie

Mon, 2023-03-06 03:43

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Thanks Ekaterina ❤️

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