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MY HEART NEARLY STOPPED

The doc said to my better half
so that I don't hear
deaf me
but I did
He said he will die of heart failure
as if that was unique
all humans who have a heart
die when their hearts stop.

since that day
now two years gone by
the docs way daily I pray
O heart keep knocking me
it says pray I do
till today it asks me
did you not pray today
it would have stopped
the doc would have asked
how
my heart beats like a woman
reels a Rosemary
my heart beats
regularly

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Yes, we need to keep breathing or our hearts will stop. Why is your doctor crying about his breathing? You are the one who this poem is about.i think you would be better off leaving that out. Geez.
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4 sure and thanks to 15
kill 2 birds or bards with one soft stone like throwing a flower hahaha lol

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