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My Goddess from the Silent Stars

When she returned to me that day
And saw I’d ceased to hope or pray
She tore the thorn crown from my brow
And swore to me this sacred vow:

“My love for you will never cease
And even when I seemed deceased
To you – while all your hair turned grey
I never really went away

And now I’ve knocked upon your door
Your aching heart will ache no more
For I will heal the hurt and pain
And never make you grieve again”

And so, my dream, that long lay dead
Like Christ, when all his blood had bled
She raised to life before my face
Gave back – not one – but every trace

Of girl, who’d crucified my soul
When love, from me, she once had stole
And warm with life, with blood and bone
Not ghost, unreal, or copied clone

She stood and shared her own cruel scars
My goddess from the silent stars
And so I’d heal and understand
She touched me with her nail-torn hands

Bestowing beauty – newly bled
And in that dawn of rusty red
We merged – two lovers into one
And my grey grief I’d lived upon

She kissed away, and as sunrise
Drew back the veil of her disguise
The sorrow of our wasted years
Seemed trifling as our childhood’s tears.

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I'm getting this right. I am thinking that there is a return of a long, lost love and though it's been many years, the fire has not gone away from them. She has her own scars to bear from the life she chose and let him know that she suffered too, in the choices that she made. Did he crucify her for leaving him and is the veil of her disguise, the years worn upon her face? I like the rhyme and pattern and I am sure that if I have read it right, that it makes sense. The thing about simile and metaphor is it is always open to interpretation. Not necessarily a bad thing, but something the poet has to live with. I enjoyed this and hope to see more from you. ~ Geezer.
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Many thanks for your feedback. Yes, your interpretation is correct; the poem's message is exactly as you have stated. Again, many thanks.

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that I got what you are trying to say with this one. Glad that you choose to write here and I hope that you will continue to write the kind of work that you have written this time. ~ Geezer.
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that I got what you are trying to say with this one. Glad that you choose to write here and I hope that you will continue to write the kind of work that you have written this time. ~ Geezer.
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"I admire an exploration of a poetical human subconscious. I implore words to weep as they are sent to work against
dead god and his musical world.

some of my poetry works whereas a fair amount of it doesn't.

I write all weeks of the livid year and have written more that 2,000 poems
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breaks in sense and sound plague quite a number of my poems and, yes, I am searching for something new vis, a life of
infinite love and languid passion,.

wishes

Mario Vitale

A beautiful piece and it somehow held my mind a while till the words ran out.
That is some soul mate you have there and to follow as I have done each moment in time, then to write as this is great.
Just have to watch that the religious side is acceptable to the many..
Yours Sparrow..

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