Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

My Friend Flicker

A spark igites
and the rest is history.

That lone, single spark
is responsible for it, all!

The laughter, tears, and anger,
depression, giddiness, and regret;

all were each but, a single live-wire.
Once lit, ther is no turning back!

However, it's the moment that decides
which avenue shall encompass

where the fire shall burn,
and exactly who should be holding the flame!

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
....and here's yet another, avenue.
Editing stage: 

Comments

...good to hear from you.
doc.

Neopoet is "newtriffic" !
...from the heart, or a reasonable faxcimile;
david a. goodwin #{:>{)} @==

author comment

'were the fire shall burn' - do you mean 'where' doc?

just in my opinion - i think this would work better in quatrains - thoughts seem a little scattered with the couplets....

and
'were each but, a single live-wire' - (again imho) would work better with 'are' instead of 'were'

i really like the concept here doc
'it's the moment that decides
which avenue shall encompass
.... were the fire shall burn,
and exactly who should hold the flame'
- has me thinking

love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

A moment held in the Now but of yesterday and tomorrow, great write there Doc,
Yours Ian.T

.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.