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My Four Walls

As I sit here within the four walls of my life
I wonder why my thoughts are so bleak
Why do I think I need to run away?
From the very thing
That has always kept me sane, my positivity

Of course, I am a happy person
But lately my bad days
Outweigh those that are great
Just sitting here, I have all sorts of thinking's
They are twisting my heart
And ringing out the happiness
From within my very soul

Being alone with my silence
Can sometimes be my very worst enemy
But it can also be
My most inventive and creative moment.

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one of those times, when you have to admire the courage of the writer. To admit that their days lately, are not the stuff dreams are made of, but a disaster. Yet having the hope and tenacity to say that better days are coming. Head up! Nice work. ~ Geez.
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Your sensitivity is beyond amazing, I was reading an article about how young people who cannot go to school are coping, whilst studying on line. It was amazing to hear what some of them said which was really relative to all of us who smart work or indeed are home for other reasons.

Thank you...Teddy

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Hi, Teddy!
Did you see the animated move "Inside Out" about the five major emotions? It is so wonderful. It suggests that all five emotions: joy, sadness, fear, anger, and disgust are valid and that one cannot be felt completely without the others. This is what your poem says to me. Being happy and not-so-happy are both genuine emotions, and being by oneself can be both lonely and fulfilling. I especially felt "...twisting my heart and ringing out the happiness from within my very soul." So vivid. You've described your heart and soul here, but also your head which tells the reader that you know you will be okay. I'm so glad you have your poetry and that you share so many tenderhearted thoughts and feelings!
Peace to you!
L

That is exactly what I was trying to describe, you guys are really amazing to take such time for the things I write. I have seen inside out, it was most interesting.

Thank you...Teddy

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I look forward to your poetry! It's about life! Covid has been unbelievable - I haven't hugged a grandchild for almost a year. That can't be right, there's nothing mentally or spiritually healthy about that. I'm just holding on to the day when I can squeeze them without hesitation or thought. It will be glorious. Your poem helps me get out of my own four walls!
xxx
L

You have just given me the greatest compliment I've ever had, I imagine your pain, you will see, this cruel moment is passing and soon you will be reunited with thousands of hugs I have no doubt.

Thank you...Teddy

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You are wonderful!
Thank you, Teddy!

This is what we do! We are only doing what we should be doing for a friend and fellow poet. This is why I'm here, to feel and find out about my family of poets. I am only too glad to take the time to "take the time", as you put it. I enjoy the honest feedback [at least I hope that it's honest] feedback from you and in turn, give back to the people that help and support me.
Thank you, ~ Geez.
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Announcing the new chatroom! I will be hosting a chatroom on Saturday nights
from 8pm until 9pm [EST] this coming Saturday. Stop in and
shoot the breeze with the Geez. Our Chatroom is open 24/7
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Double post too excited.

Thank you...Teddy

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I'm no expert at free verse but I have heard that being concise is something to strive for. (I keep hearing this because I'm NOT concise lol). But here's your poem with some thinning out. And don't worry, things will get better :

within the four walls of my life
why are my thoughts so bleak
Why do I think I need to run away?
From my anchor, my positivity

I am a happy person
But lately my bad days
Outweigh those that are great
Just sitting here, I have all sorts of thoughts
They twist my heart
And ring out the happiness
within my very soul

alone

with my silence
sometimes be my very worst enemy
But it can also be
My most creative moment.

OK, just an alternative you might smoke over

So nice to see you, thanks so much for your input I will consider everything. Stay cool. X

Thank you...Teddy

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Your creative moment it is. We all are victims of life's circling phases. Though after each phase, we come out invariably stronger and better.

Bathe yourself with poetry and let the world go to pieces.

Hello my friend, yes we all have the ability to be productive.
Especially now,
It's a time to remember this.

Thank you...Teddy

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