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My Flowery Youth...(Edited by Gee)

Youth is a fountain
which must one day dry
Within our aging skin
and beneath balding hair
our hearts can remain youthful

In our aged dreams
we can water youthful hearts
the youngster still remains
and needs only memories to feed on
Pause; a comma, is not a coma
if our lonely hearts are still strong

Oh youth, do not flee
be free, be free
Take me, take me

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

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Youth is a fountain
which must one day dry
Within our aging skin
and beneath balding hair
our hearts can remain youthful

There is more, but I leave it to you to figure it out.

The rest:

In our aged dreams
we can water youthful hearts
the youngster still remains
and needs only memories to feed on
Pause; a comma, is not a coma
if our lonely hearts are still strong

Oh youth, do not flee
be free, be free
Take me, take me

~ Geez.
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That's nice thanks
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kindly d the rest my old poem
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author comment

in your youth you would have been heartthrob of many lol you are free Geeeeee

Youth is a fountain
which must one day dry
Within our aging skin
and beneath balding hair
our hearts can remain youthful

In our aged dreams
we can water youthful hearts
the youngster still remains
and needs only memories to feed on
Pause; a comma, is not a coma
if our lonely hearts are still strong

Oh youth, do not flee
be free, be free
Take me, take me

~ Geez.

author comment

you liked what I did, you put it all together well. ~ Geez.
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I will replace it if you agree up to ye

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do as you will with it. I just tried to help out, I didn't write it. ~ Geez.
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