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MY FATHER'S HOUSE

Submitted by Geremia on Mon, 2012-03-19 19:30

MY FATHER’S HOUSE

My father’s house is built
of mortar and stone
and stands a thousand years
or more
strong among all others
alone.

My father’s house is my name
and my name is the world
I carry in my seed

My father’s house is honor
dignity and pride.

I am my father’s house
standing strong
alone
against the shame
you bring to your own

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

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Geremia

Mon, 2012-03-19 21:42

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Poem is based on recent DNA studies regadng the truth about my grandfather's illegitimacy. If grandpa only knew the hstory of his line he would not have felt the "stigma" of his birth. Now I know my real last name and found a family I never knew. Can't say much more. But a secnd cousin found me n a site because w e matched DNA as close as was possible..

Now I am working on fnding his mother. And I am close.

Adesso tutto sarà a posto ! Now all will be in place.

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Cloudthings

Mon, 2012-03-19 23:19

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I like this, especially in the light of the story you add, I am always torn as to whether to add the background on writing, it does change the perception, but I can't say that's a good or bad thing... Anyway, in this case it was an addition to having been left with quite a solid & clear poem that told a story without being too crude about it, always a good thing.

Cheers
A

Cheers
Anni

My dear friend always told me "Water the seeds of joy first"

Geremia

Mon, 2012-03-19 23:57

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Thanks. This poem had to be simple and clear

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