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My Cat's Name (June Contest)

Inspired by “The Naming of Cats” by T. S. Eliot From Old Possum’s Book of Practical Cats ~1939

The Naming of Cats is a difficult matter,
It isn’t just one of your holiday games;
You may think at first I’m as mad as a hatter
When I tell you, a cat must have THREE DIFFERENT NAMES.
First of all, there’s the name that the family use daily,
Such as Peter, Augustus, Alonzo, or James,
Such as Victor or Jonathan, George or Bill Bailey —
All of them sensible everyday names.
There are fancier names if you think they sound sweeter,
Some for the gentlemen, some for the dames:
Such as Plato, Admetus, Electra, Demeter —
But all of them sensible everyday names.
But I tell you, a cat needs a name that’s particular,
A name that’s peculiar, and more dignified,
Else how can he keep up his tail perpendicular,
Or spread out his whiskers, or cherish his pride?
Of names of this kind, I can give you a quorum,
Such as Munkstrap, Quaxo, or Coricopat,
Such as Bombalurina, or else Jellylorum —
Names that never belong to more than one cat.
But above and beyond there’s still one name left over,
And that is the name that you never will guess;
The name that no human research can discover —
But THE CAT HIMSELF KNOWS, and will never confess.
When you notice a cat in profound meditation,
The reason, I tell you, is always the same:
His mind is engaged in a rapt contemplation
Of the thought, of the thought, of the thought of his name:
His ineffable effable
Effanineffable
Deep and inscrutable singular Name.
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My Cat's Name (June Contest)

My mornings
awaken slowly,
softly with a gentle
Tap –tap-tap
upon my face.
Ah, my sweet
dark chocolate,
caramel cream
delightful Torti',
“Snickers” in repose,
so near to me
her whiskers tickle
on my nose
while her kiwi colored
eyes slowly close.
They show me
all her love
and I reciprocate
the same.
My words whisper
quietly how much
I love her
and she answers me
with her robust
Purring,
Chirping,
Loudly
to finish off
my sleep.

©2019 Marthalyn Seavey

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also poets follow instructions about as well as cats.
https://www.neopoet.com/contest/inspired-writes-june-contest

"Place the inspiring poem with author then enter your resulting poem right below so readers can read both on the same page."

Loved the poem, it catches the mood, imagery and feeling perfectly. My only crit is that ending exclamation mark. It is worse than superfluous, I think it rather spoils the gentle affection of the piece making it teeter towards mawkish sentimentality which it otherwise deftly avoids. Yes! One little punctuation point can make that much difference!! Two exclamation points are always redundant!!! and three or more are a sure sign of psychosis!!!!!!

You are permitted to edit the poem right up to closing date of the contest.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Directors

I agree with your critique. It was a tossup whether I would use an exclamation point or not. In fact, I added it at the last moment which lends itself to an old Mainer' proverb, "If it ain't broke, don't fix it".
Thank you, Jess.

Marthalyn

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Is Maine really scary?

I read all King's work up to "Tommyknockers" which was bloody dreadful but it was his 'telegraphing' that broke him for me as a writer.
"As she walked out the door he didn't know it would be the last time he would see her alive."
Shits me to tears.

cheers,
Jess
Neopoet Directors

Maine has trees, lots of trees, deep woods and secret, sacred places hidden out of sight, where poets meet and dance freely around the firelight, and then they stop and rest a while to write.

Marthalyn

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Enjoyed very much both poems.
I like it much better without the exclamation.
it's quite an enjambment and works great with short lines.
Best of luck,

~Mark~

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Pets are a favorite subject and my dear Snickers is a beloved companion.

Marthalyn

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One of my favorites and a beloved musical. Such fun with words and rhyme. I enjoyed your little nod to your Snickers,.whose name seems like it is a perfect fit.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

I'm glad you enjoyed my write.

Marthalyn

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