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My Adaption of the Seven Deadly Sins

LUST
I dream of nothing but you
even though my heart should be with another
I would gladly walk through flames of fire
to be free from this aching wish to have you
My lack of self-control
will be the very weakened power
that kills me
I’m restless in knowing I will be
lusting death itself.

GLUTTONY
Over-indulgence has led me away from the needy
My desire to have everything for myself
I take great satisfaction in knowing it’s all mine
Temptation is my vice and it's delicious
If I could I would devour it without shame
No thought for others
I will jump into the deepest river of chocolate
and drink it dry.

SLOTH
Realizing my talents
could lead to a broken nail
If I acknowledge self-worth
I would have to do something about it
I lack the urge to do better
It's a gift I was born with
Eating the bread of idleness
keeps me from hunger
I'm nobody’s boss
I'll leave that to the unfortunate slaves
who believe in doing better
Laziness that I have accepted wilfully
will be my personal failure.

WRATH
Holding anger's rage and hate deep within
Pure self-destructiveness
internally eating me alive.

ENVY
Jealousy so powerful
Resenting all that my neighbours have
My desire to see them deprived
So painful to watch others enjoy life
I will gladly sew my eyes shut with a needle and thread
If I could dance with the green eyed monster
But even without eyes
I couldn’t promise not to envy him.

GREED
My behavior
helps manipulate the weak
Trickery is my foreplay
material things I hoard with pleasure
The thought of someone
having more than I
just leaves me with an aching
to take at no cost
I’m blinded by obsession
Constantly wishing for more
alas in pursuit of wealth and mere objects
I am left poor.

PRIDE
Boasting myself in a costume of glory
It may be the most deplorable sin
but it is as beautiful as I
I'll compete with the Greater Being
I do believe I can win
I often wonder
Is pride really the worst sin?

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Such an ambitious undertaking; met with a good deal of salient work! One surely mustn't accuse you of being Slothful; but, maybe of Lusting after the enormous accolades, you will recieve for this endevour. You will undoubtably be Prideful and with a righteous Greed from the Envious, they will instill in yourself, a Gluttoness response and therein incur the Wrath of those that will say you are not playing fair. I am impressed and maybe a bit envious myself. I wish that I had written this. ~ Geez.
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Dearest Geezer, if it wasn't for you a few others and of course neopoet this wouldn't have been achieved, your words mean so much because I give a massive respect for you and your work so I can really say with all my heart thank you. You are a true great of neo and I'm proud to be here sharing with you all. I'm so happy that you like it Sir.

Thank you...Teddy

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acknowledges your taste in heroes; but has to admit, that you have attained great stature yourself, here on Neo.
Take your own little bow and I think that you will have a number of curtain-calls. ~ Geez.
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Geezer took all my words of praise for your accomplishment and leaves me with only a few meaningless words to utter. Whata bang-up job you went and done, dear girl! Astonishing! And the sentence flow, word choices ain't bad either; perfect cohesion! In short--a wonderful job. We must frame your masterpiece, okay? Truly great work, Teddy. Yours, Jerry

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I cannot thank you enough for your help and kindness JK it was a fun project and I'm thrilled with the finished product. Thank you for following each of these and being my champion.

Thank you...Teddy

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instead of thread and needle, i've changed it to needle and thread, sometimes i think in italian.
thanks to my lovely brother who noticed.

Thank you...Teddy

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either works, at least for me; however, common usage would be "Needle and Thread" BINGO! lol. The idjit, Jeyryr.

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That addresses these seven soooo well. Can’t say I have ever read a poem about these seven other than In the original, altho that may not have been a poem now that I think about it. Nope, not a poem, rather a liturgy . Such a part of our culture.

How lovely to see you here, I'm glad you like it Sir, and I'm glad it's a rare peice, in your eyes. I've worked hard to get it where it is today. Honoured you like it.

Thank you...Teddy

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