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Mutations of Living Ones is Evolution

Mutations of Living Ones is Evolution

....nothing else is ordained for bacteria like agents
but mutate day in day out
with folks different
their cultures must become inherent
in mutations followed by another one

life's ways are multi
not a single one
but evolution is the only alternate
to any existence

we today's products become sub and system of another
if I may add
experienced or intelligent generation
repeating the same pattern of act
for millennia to come

believe me not
how can anyone I force
most have diffused brains
fuses burnt

Style / type: 
Free verse
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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

I think you should refine this by re-writing the lines of:
"[and] evolution is the alternate...

"We become sub and system of the others"

Delete [If I may add] it adds nothing to the line before or after it.

"Experienced and intelligent generations
repeating the same pattern for millennia to come."

"how can I force anyone?"
~ Geez.
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shall do
as I evolve to satisfy you
my mentor

author comment

I like the flow of this.

S4 L4 could use a “with” at the beginning… “with fuses burnt”

S3 L4 could become “using the same acts and patterns”

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shall look into it having compy probs since morning
sorry

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may not interact for a while buying afresh or gift bye for now all

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