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The Murder in Sixth Street Alley...

Submitted by Geezer on Mon, 2022-07-25 06:47

Sitting in my unlit window
in the dark, I watch the alley
Sweaty and yet chilled
from the scene before me
I watch the struggle and see
the gleam of a knife flashing
Once, twice, a third time
and with a muffled, gurgling sound
an indistinct form falls
limp against the dumpster
I give a start, my chair squeaks...
the murderer stares in my direction.

Style / type:

Free verse

Review Request (Intensity):

I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Review Request (Direction):

What did you think of my title?

How does this theme appeal to you?

Last few words:

This is a round-robin for 5 members here on Neo. it is an experiment to see how well a thing like this will go. If it goes well, there will be more and others will be invited to join and make their own. The rules are: 1] Each member will follow an order of appearance. 2] They will follow the story-line 3] they will be allowed 12 lines, [no more] 4] when the last person has had their turn, the story will be concluded and hopefully in a manner appreciated by all. 5] Each person will be allowed to start their own story at the end of each story. [They may decide if Free-verse or rhyme]. 6] this experiment will take a couple of weeks. We would appreciate the comments and critique of anyone on the site and may make adjustments accordingly.

Editing stage:

Editing - draft

Content level:

Not Explicit Content

Comments

Candlewitch

Mon, 2022-07-25 08:38

it sounds good....

I didn't realize I was holding my breath until I reached the end. the story line is thrilling! I can't wait to see what comes next! this would make a good murder mystery! will you autograph my copy?

*hugs, Cat

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When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

Geezer

Mon, 2022-07-25 14:37

I guess...

we will all have to autograph each other's! LoL
~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

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Obadiah Grey

Mon, 2022-07-25 13:32

Oh, You Tantalus You!

Oh, You Tantalus You!
Must admit to a Bated breath moment,
A, yeah, yeah, yeah,,,,,,,,,,

Oh, fuckin' 'ell moment.

Hope it goes well. Obi.

Geezer

Mon, 2022-07-25 14:45

I am...

so glad that this seems to be intriquing to all that have responded so far. It bodes well for the experiment! Thank you for your enthusiastic response. ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

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RoseBlack

Mon, 2022-07-25 14:25

A good start

Can't wait to see where this goes! I'm on the edge of my seat
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~RoseBlack~

Geezer

Mon, 2022-07-25 14:43

Don't let it squeak...

I'm glad that it is so well recieved, I really hope that it goes well and we can continue this on a regular basis. I'm sure that you all will keep this going in an equally good fashion. ~ Geez.
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This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place

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RoseBlack

Mon, 2022-07-25 14:54