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The Ms. Madonnamonica Pop, Con Show Supreme - (Strong adult language content)

Things can only help define
her as undefinable;

seemingly frail, oppose her you'll fail
give her one reason, she's had a belly full!

Purely in my interest I notice
all instances start resembling "luck";

she'll always look great, although "fashionably late"
because of you she will not give a "fuck".

Merely an independent sparkle of an act
that's more "smoke" than "mirrors" I think;

but, don't you surmise, or she will surprise
you-during a most "regrettable blink"!

Using her misdirectional way with "grace"
she propels her precise-private con;

before you leave, you'll reluctantly believe
her whole story, with your assets all gone!

So vague with her hidden agendas
that "pulsate"as she orchestrates in the air;

before your own eyes, you'll soon realize
this crazy bitch plays a game that's not, "fair".

So quickly she smoothly manipulates
every moment 'til they all fill a "chain";

a necklace of rules, that glistens at fools
which she wears until none dare remain!

Also with this stoic knowledge
after all's been said and done;

without any choice, in your serious voice
you've helped "fix" all the bells that she's rung!

So the most highly recommended "flight-plan"
whether flying too "low" or too "fast';

is fly under each star, and all forms of radar
or she'll be handing to you your own "ass";

and while we're actually at "it",
never mind about questioning "why";

you'll soon know "full well", you've helped make your "own hell"
and naively became her tight alibi!

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Your title caught my eye! What an enjoyable read for me to discover! I like your subtle rhyming scheme. It is very hard to choose favorite lines with this piece but I think I like these best:

and while we're actually at "it",
never mind about questioning, "why";

you'll soon know "full well", you've helped make your, "own hell"
and naively became her, alibi.

very clever!

always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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...you've gone and made my "day", once again. Thanx, sooo very much for your bright comments.......by the way, I was actually going for "clever".
Good "eye", and good-day;
sincerely,
doc.

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