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Moving Forward

Submitted by alidzain on Tue, 2016-08-16 11:21

I burn the painful memories of the past
and watch as the wind scatter their ashes away.
My heart, is free to reach beyond the stars
I'm ready to face the trials of life! Come what may..

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Free verse
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Vivovon

Wed, 2016-08-17 14:28

A very spirited poem. Courageous. I love it. Yes, the future is more important than the past.

xxxxx

alidzain

Wed, 2016-08-17 18:16

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Vivovon

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