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A Mother's Prayer
Bless the union of these souls
as they become whole
A myriad of thoughts run through my head
as I watch my young one being wed
Through a veil of tears I do recall
there was a time when you were so small
Here you stand taking your vows
so many years has brought you to now
To Travis I give my precious one
it is with pride I now call you son
A lifetime of love I wish for you
years of happiness for you too
A union that should never grow old
forever is circled in bands of gold
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I wrote this for my daughter who will be married on 20June 2020
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c lynn brooks
Wed, 2020-06-10 17:26
Teddy
thank you I am so happy for her he is a wonderful young man
Chrys
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author commentLavender
Wed, 2020-06-10 17:00
Mother's Prayer
Hello, Chrys,
This is very special. Not certain if it was intentional, but 'veil of tears' connected me even closer to your relationship with your daughter - soon to be bride. Congratulations on a very precious and monumental event!
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c lynn brooks
Wed, 2020-06-10 17:28
Lavender
Thank you my daughter and I have a very close relationship which I am so thankful for
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author commentRula
Wed, 2020-06-10 17:25
The man in
Command is absolutely lucky to have you as a mother in low Gracy. May your ink ever flow with love dear
Congrats to you all.
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c lynn brooks
Wed, 2020-06-10 17:30
Rula
minor correction it is I that is gaining a son in law not Gracy
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author commentRula
Thu, 2020-06-11 09:11
Oops
sorry dear Chrys
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Geezer
Thu, 2020-06-11 08:41
I'm thinking...
that your son-in-law is lucky to have a great mother-in-law. Giving your children to someone else's care, is a great thing when you know that they are good people. My only crit. is that I think that you should have said; "years of happiness for you [two]."
Gee.
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c lynn brooks
Thu, 2020-06-11 08:44
Gee
Thank you
I meant too as in also but also didn't sound correct
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author commenttyro
Thu, 2020-06-11 12:43
very touching and very
very touching and very sentimental I loved it, and what touched me most is the honesty of the feeling. The first couplet I found the most powerful of the poem. A sweet heartfelt write.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
c lynn brooks
Thu, 2020-06-11 15:21
Tyro
Thank you so much
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