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Mother (Part 2:)

The time of your existence was a succour
to us all.
Every assistance we needed always came through you.

Now you're no more with us here to reveal us the way forward.
Your absence had defrauded us the joy of our hearts.

For so long our memories always haunts us day and night.
We need your presence at least once in a while.

We need you to talk to us how your journey had been.
Since you took the part of all flesh - a vacuum had been created.

Although you're irreplaceable mother whose life is unquantifiable.
The labor of love you showed towards humanity is immeasurable.

Both Dick and Harry felt the light of your goodness.
The world stands at ease waiting for your reincarnation.

The sanctity of life you lived never for once departed out of you.
You are a woman of virtue whose simplicity of life is worth emulating.

I will forever adhere to all the words of life you always taught me.
Adieu nnem oma, adieu till we meet and part no more.

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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Hello,Jack,
What warm, loving words! It sounds like her integrity is definitely worth emulating.
Thank you,
L

And thanks so much for stopping by.
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"By virtue of creativity, my literary genre is poetry".

~Jackweb

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