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The Morning After

Well who would have guessed
I would be in this mess
there's a ring in his ear and a tattoo on his chest
three's a drum in my head,who's this guy in my bed
if this isn't a dream I'd be better off dead

Can someone tell me how it all began
when I made a promise not to do it again but just look at what's standing right by my chair
tall dark and handsome
tight jeans long hair

Now who would have guessed ,I'd be in this mess
there's a beard on his face that goes down to his chest
is that his bike outside, was I taken for a ride
if this isn't a dream,where's the gun let me die

stayed out last night till three or four
I was feeling kind of lonesome
or maybe kind of bored
should have left when I wanted
should have seen what he was
what I saw was Adonis
what I got was much worse

So who would have guessed
I'd be in this mess
what I thought was a ten was a four at best

there's a drum in my head.who's this guy in my bed
if this isn't a dream,I'd be better off dead

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Lyrics was I taken for a ride is a double entendre( has two meanings)
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Thank you I will make the correction

Chrys

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I think
u missed a
B

I would(be) in this mess

Thank you
will check

Chrys

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Let your mercy spill on all those
burning hearts in hell( L.Cohen)

You sure know how to make mess. You want Killer to come and get rid of him? He doesn't have to kill him, just scare the Bjesus out of him. I thought this was a great piece of imaginative writing, [How much is imagination?] Loved it! ~ Gee.
.P.S. Fix that long line.
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Thank yu lol your coment was funnier than the poem
psssst all of it is imagination ahem

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