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More than an Appetizer

In the darkness
I let my faith light the way.
My demons are hitchhiking.
They said I was too patient.
And it took all the fun away.

Anxiety, oh how you tease me.
Sorry to dampen your plans
This task will not be easy.

Faith is my advisor
I’m more like a gourmet meal
You were expecting an appetizer.

Need a moment or two.
I bought you a stopwatch.
Let me know when is good for you.

What are your palms sweaty?
Anxiety, the psychiatrist called.
Said to start therapy.
Whenever you are ready

You wanted the end of me
Instead I turned into
Your worst enemy

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The below is a computer generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "More than an Appetizer" is a thought-provoking piece that explores the theme of overcoming anxiety and trusting in one's faith. The imagery used throughout the poem is vivid and striking, particularly in the first stanza where the speaker describes their demons as hitchhikers. The use of the stopwatch metaphor in the third stanza is also effective in conveying the speaker's desire to take their time and not rush through the task at hand.

One potential improvement to the poem could be to revise the line "I’m more like a gourmet meal" to "I'm more than just an appetizer." This change would emphasize the theme of the poem and the speaker's belief in their own worth and importance.

Overall, "More than an Appetizer" is a well-crafted poem that effectively conveys its message. The use of imagery and metaphor adds depth to the piece, and the message of overcoming anxiety and trusting in one's faith is one that many readers will find relatable.

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it sounds to me like you have been calm and patient for a very long time. your strengths have been turned against you. it is almost like this person who vexes you knows how to sweetly turn the knife. and thinks that they have the upper hand. your nature has you waiting for a change that will never come without some very hard work and confrontation. you must face the question: is this relationship worth all the pain it is causing? can it be resolved? I love how you turn the tide at the end of the poem and refuse to take punishment anymore. you are ready for a fight. this person has woken a sleeping dragon. for you know all of his/her weaknesses, too. this person has your civility in a corner and you have come out fighting. excellent work!

*hugs, Cat

p.s
you are too nice.

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