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Moon Rise & Sun Fade... (by: eddy styx)

Moon Rise & Sun Fade

Ripper, Jack
is my hero and God,
in his footsteps
I've painstakingly trod.
tales of legend
I've often heard,
of how he miss led
and how he lured

Jack and I
are almost one
he the mentor
I the student
he bids me wait,
'til day is done,
as always, I find
his advice prudent.

I hear his voice
inside my head
it is my choice
to hear the dead.
only an eye blink away
advises I ply my honest trade
throughout the day
preparing for moon-rise and sun fade...

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a great piece, in showing the influence of "Jack"!
Killer and the boys liked this one a lot!
Good advice from Old Jack, he knows his business!

The only typo I see, is that of the spelling of [misled].
Boy, you've got us in the mood for the next tale of Killer, Sir Gee
and Anubis! Hugs from all, Geez.
.

It seems that the days and hours that people
are available for chatroom are staggered and
not a good match for most everyone. How about
if everyone just shows up at the door, whenever
they have a few free minutes?

old Jack new his business. and more important, he never got caught!

ever, eddy
*Hugs Cat

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