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The Moon and I (senryu)

Moon is my lover
light that beams my path of night
never fails to shine

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Senryu 5/7/5 emotion.
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Not Explicit Content

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nice!!! I love the moon in all its phases, so does eddy styx, but he loves the new moon best! lol!

*hugs, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

LOL I'm shivering now! I'm glad you enjoyed this. Tell eddy I no longer walk alone at night. (Hugs)

Thank you...Teddy

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Your Senryu seems to be fine, but are you of the male gender that you carry a torch for Diana the moon goddess?
Uh-ooh! I forgot--is the moon masculine in Italian as he/she would be in German? Just googled: "The modern English poetic usage when personifying the sun and moon has taken up the French or Romance gender for sol (masculine) and luna (feminine), instead of retaining the Germanic grammatical genders where the sun is feminine and the moon masculine." Oh, nevermind. You've got yourself a fine senryu, and I have forgotten to take my meds last night. Thank you, Teddy
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Good morning Sir, no I'm still a lady but I am a fan of the great moon who for me is also Lady, I am very pleased you have enjoyed this little piece, now the season is changing the sky has become even more delightful.by night.

Thank you...Teddy

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Dear Teddy, what a lovely senryu about the moon, perfect! I've always known the moon to be feminine and the sun masculine.
I also love the moon, so it's with pleasure that I read your senryu. All the best, moon lover.

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"My soul is painted like the wings of butterflies; fairy tales of yesterday will grow but never die, I can fly, my friends.” – Freddie Mercury

The pleasure is all mine, glad to know you are a moon lover too.

Thank you...Teddy

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