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It used to be under the bed,
in the closet and in my head.
A harmless figment
of an imagination,
exaggerated by the mind
of a little child.

These days, it is real
it is what I feel,
the darkness residing inside.
In my heart, is where it hides,
waiting to be unleashed,
demanding to be released
in a moment of weakness
when I am helpless
it will strike like a viper,
the terrible monster

I have kept it caged with patience,
rational thinking and tolerance
but I always fear of losing control
and chaos will unfold.

Somewhere, in the depths of my mind,
it is bidding its time,
waiting to be set free.

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you're not entirely wrong. My darkness in this poem refers to my temper but it can also be anyones' dark side. When we're young, we see "unreal" monsters and when we grow older, the monsters cannot be seen. Its inside us, the part which make us continue with our bad habits like for example, smoking and poor diet. We all have our own personal monster inside us.


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I knew this was about control of our own demons and how you have boxed them up and filed them in a controlled place.
I thought this write was good and flowed from under the bed to the one that is in your head,
Well done, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

for the visit and the comments.


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I really like the rhyming scheme - and I can totally relate to the subject. I think you have hit the nail on the head with regard the monster that lives inside us! I also like the contrast you make between the harmless imaginary monster under the bed and the insidious monster that, given the chance can cause chaos if allowed to be unleashed. ( fortunately ( in my experience ) the monster mellows with age, that doesn't mean it doesn't surface now and again though! ). You very well portray how hard it is to keep it under control in the last two stanza's.

Very well done Alid - keep up the good work.

Love Mand xxxx

My monster (my temper, that is) is still bugging me now and then, especially with the problem in the neopoet website. Kinda struggling. Anyway, I am glad you like this piece. Thank you for the visit and the comment.


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