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Moment of truth

Yes it is awkward
I hope it was better
It has a way hard
Who are you to be setter
Calm down and be armed

It is a way of growth
Time of communication
Life of the stars on an oath
This is we and perception
Oh no its wrong to south
Beats on a heart caution
Word in a mouth

Sorry but its real
Love is being loved
And you have that

Good morning

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How is it

author comment

I can feel the apprehension of the
poets voice in this
proud and yet giving
the hesitation
societies role of male female
in modern era has changed
our past is more merged
with co operation of both
sexes today
and need be as we
hurtle towards a destiny
manifesto that includes
all on an equal basis

but culturally..
in only a third generation
split from very different
times...well its been much!

a careful approach
in the quest for acceptance
and Love
both too the self and
abject of search

I relate to the feeling
in this
I have too pull back
my matriarch control
so much
and the male ego
of which I have a
great amount
but as I turn down
that volume
and just be more
softer the reception
has been greater
for me

thank U!

and I was like a mother hen
the paternal side kicks in
pretty damned good heavy
and strong when the need
arises

rejection was a moot
point so much
that I eventually missed
when I actually was
accepted
too carry that battle
flag about
so finally in this old
age just before
it was too late
I softened a bit

again

thank U!

well thanks for the words really I don't know what to say you just got me stunned
.
thank you

author comment

souls within...society conforms our operational platforms and behavioural mode
in that...with greed..power etc we are the intelligent animals...worse then animals
we push beyond intuition into the realms of dark...
and equally so we have it in us to rise so far above and become the
great leaders...even on the one on ones..
rather then the pure distilled dictatorships of hearts
(or none)
I find poets to be diplomats..(and raconteurs)

I sense the classic vocation teachings in your words
and although I have limited words use compared to
those I admire....
I like words!!

thank U!

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